5月12日是全国防灾减灾日 (National Disaster Prevention and Mitigation Day)，每年学校都会组织疏散演练 (evacuation drill)，但是大部分学生对此不够重视，参与度不高。为完善现有活动，学校正在向全体同学征集建议。假设你是该校的学生李明，请你写一封信给学校，信中需包括：

1. 简述疏散演练中的2点不足之处；

2. 提供相应的完善建议，并分析其预计效果。

参考范文：

Dear School Administration,

I’m Li Ming, a student at our school. I’m writing to share my thoughts on enhancing our evacuation drills. Currently, there are two significant issues. Firstly, the drills follow a fixed routine every year. Students just line up and walk out quickly, regarding it as a tiresome task rather than a life-saving practice. Secondly, we rarely receive any feedback after the drills. Without understanding our mistakes, we can’t improve our emergency response skills.

To address these problems, I have two suggestions. First, we could vary the drill scenarios, such as simulating a gas leak or a night-time evacuation, which would make the drills more challenging and engaging. Second, teachers should hold a brief meeting after each drill to analyze our performance, showing us what we did wrong and how to do better. This way, students will take the drills more seriously and truly learn how to protect ourselves in disasters.

Sincerely,

Li Ming

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生就为完善学校现有疏散演练活动提出建议。其内容包括：述疏散演练中的2点不足之以及提供相应的完善建议，并分析其预计效果。

(详解)

1. 词汇积累

目前：currently → at present

重要的：significant → important

首先：firstly → to begin with

解决：address → solve

2. 句式拓展

简单句变复合句

原句：I’m writing to share my thoughts on enhancing our evacuation drills.

拓展句：I’m writing to share my thoughts on how we can enhance our evacuation drills.

(点睛)

(高分句型1) “Students just line up and walk out quickly, regarding it as a tiresome task rather than a life-saving practice.” (运用了现在分词作状语。)

(高分句型2) “First, we could vary the drill scenarios, such as simulating a gas leak or a night-time evacuation, which would make the drills more challenging and engaging.” (运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句。)